One piece of feedback I received from my generous friend who recently read Under was my dialogue felt forced. Her advice was to add facial expressions, hand gestures, and bits of action. I should be better at this since I teach my own fourth graders this very strategy, but I had written this story many years ago.
As I continue to revise Under I have been paying special attention to this issue. I hope everyone can see the improvements when Under is finally available on Amazon! And thank you Robin Puelma for you amazing feedback!