With a five day break from school, I’ve found myself with some writing time. I’m officially halfway through implementing Robin Puelma’s feedback and edits she gave me for BACK OF BEYOND. I know I mentioned this before, but her comments for me to cut my overly described characters, settings, and fight scenes have vastly improved the flow and pacing of the story.
Even more important is her critique that my first draft needed a dilemma for Spoon. Of course, Robin is completely correct. Spoon achieved a goal. Yet, he lacked a solid dilemma. Well, I’m pleased to say the story is so much better now that Spoon is trying to work through a dilemma. SO MUCH BETTER! Can’t wait to finish the second draft to see how Spoon changes at the end of the story.
I’m part way through Robin Puelma’s edits for my first draft and BACK OF BEYOND! I can’t thank you enough for reading over my story. This manuscript will be so much better because of your hard work. It’s nice to have someone call me out on my overactive deceptions and drawn out fight scenes. Thanks for making me a better writer, too!
Fun to remember this comment left on my blog almost two years ago!!! This comment alone has allowed me to stay motivated on finishing THE LEGEND OF SPOON, BOOK 2: BACK OF BEYOND! From Brady on May 30, 2015.
I have amazing friends!!! Dustin is editing UNDER, Taylor is editing DESCENDANTS, Robin is editing BACK OF BEYOND (The Legend of Spoon Book #2), and Dawn is editing NINTH NIGHT. These four stories have been on my computer for years and I’m beyond excited to see them closer than ever to being self-published.
I just sent my first draft to Robin Puelma to read it over for feedback. Her comments are always invaluable to me this early in the writing process. Thanks, Robin!!!
Robin Puelma just finished her second reading/editing of UNDER! Her feedback on this story has been superb. I’m passing UNDER off to another amazing friend, Dawn Wilson, who is an expert with the red pen. I can’t wait to get this story out to the masses. I’m not sure if I’ll have anyone else read UNDER through before I upload it to Amazon, but I will let everyone know.
Here is the debut novel from my friend Robin Puelma! http://smile.amazon.com/gp/product/1517402360…
Twelve-year-old Luke Cedrus lives in the most un-magical place (an adoption ward), under the authority of the most un-magical person (Mrs. Hall), believing only un-magical things happen to him (detention). Until one night, Luke discovers he is anything but un-magical. He is a keeper of magic. The one thing Luke wants in life? Family. With his new magical powers, he’s convinced he can have just that.
Or can he?
Immediately, life flips upside-down as in one night, he must escape from the ward to save his life and learns that his mother is dead and his father is wanted for the murder of a powerful keeper.
Now, engulfed by his new magical surroundings, Luke faces ridicule and ultimate danger for the actions of his father. Plus, after discovering an evil keeper’s secret plot to dominate keepers everywhere, Luke is thrust into an adventure well beyond his years.
It’ll take the help of his new friends, magical key, and sheer belief in himself to tackle the terrors facing the keeper world. And discover what family truly means.